Greetings Tennis Shoes fans!
For Halloween I thought I'd give readers a taste of a small section of a chapter from the latest Tennis Shoes novel, Thorns of Glory. Yup, this is a scene from the battle at Cumorah. Be reminded that this is a rough draft. I'll make many changes myself before the publisher even gets their mits on it. It's also a bit violent. I warned my readers in the last chapter note of Book 11: Sorcerers and Seers that my efforts to describe this event realistically would demand parental guidance. Just know that every time I sit down to write I ask and re-ask myself where to draw the line and when too much is too much. My judgment is not always perfect, but I still think it's important to constantly and prayerfully ask. Feedback is also appreciated!
I wanted to remind fans who wish to purchase any books or audios from me directly that I'll include with every order a free copy of the book or DVD of Passage to Zarahemla, the book A Return to Christmas, or the book Muckwhip's Guide to Capturing the Latter-day Soul--all personally signed to whomever the buyer requests. I'll strive to beat any competitors. Call me at 801-870-2070. If I don't answer, send a text. I'll call back. Visa or MC happily accepted.
Last point: We are looking VERY forward to launching our new podcast, foreverLDS.com. This will be both a podcast AND a blogsite. We hope it will quickly become the new "hub" of all things Tennis Shoes and Heimerdinger. Look to late November/early December.
Stay close to the Lord,
Chris Heimerdinger
This Tennis Shoes preview is told from the point of view of Brock McConnell (SaKerra McConnell's 14-year-old brother):
I cried his name again, louder. "Gigiddonihah! Commander Gid! Commander Gid!"
Then I felt like an idiot. Gid was fighting three men at once. My
shouts could've distracted him; gotten him killed. Instead of yammering like a
banshee, I reached behind my shoulder and grabbed my sword. I armed myself
without lowering the banner an inch; I felt weirdly proud of that. Nephites
were still flocking to me—flocking to the battle standard—scrambling over dead bodies
to take on all comers who threatened me or my wooden sculpture of a Scorpion on a pole.
Gid drove the enemy backwards. He was the "point" of
the Nephite spear, so to speak; he personally led the effort to halt the
Lamanite advance. I glanced at my black blade. I was probably the biggest dufus
on this entire hill for arming myself with a weapon I didn't know how to use. I
didn't think about that. As I ponder it now, I fell into a trance of sorts.
It was as if I'd been doused with courage, like sizzling, liquid metal. Or
mettle. I felt a surge of bravery I never knew was inside me.
Instead of screaming at Gid, I followed him. I charged behind
him as he cut down all takers who stood in his way. More Scorpion soldiers
stood side-by-side with him, many locking shields together in a kind of wall,
defending their commander and each other. It wasn't so easy keeping up. Other
Scorpions fought to keep pace with Gid, just like me. They followed the banner;
followed their general. I felt important. Essential. What a thing! Men were using
me as their guide. I was unbreakable. Nothing could hurt me. Nothing could slow
me down.
I was right behind Gid; I could have clipped him in the helmet
with top of my pole. He still hadn't seen me, and I wasn't about to break his
concentration. He was like this mechanized Ninja. Something beautiful struck me
about his motions. Something terrifying. It was martial arts, dancing, and
death-by-precision. No movement was wasted. Gid chopped an enemy's
sword in half—that is, he broke the blade and
severed the man's right arm in a brutal swipe. His victim howled raggedly,
but he wasn't dead. He just fell back into the sea of faces.
Gid maneuvered his axe into a backhanded swing, slicing a gaping
wound in a Lamanite's back, near the base of his spine. Again, the man wasn't
dead. Gid didn't care if an opponent lived or died. He seemed to prefer
incapacitation. Not out of mercy, just 'cause it was quicker. He chose the swiftest
way to make sure that challengers never fought again. The man Gid had slashed in the
back knelt before me. He looked up, on the verge, I think, of collapsing
sideways so fate could handle the rest. Instead, I decided his fate. I stabbed the point of my obsidian sword in his
chest. I don't know why. I just lunged. No forethought. The tip penetrated his
flesh below the collarbone. Most Lamanites wore no armor or padding. Just a
colorful tunic—orange and blue and white. Soon the cloth got red as it absorbed blood from the wound I'd given him.
Something snapped in me. Not like a snap of fingers; more like
the pop of a hundred panes of glass, echoing from every room, above, below, and
around. Sound and sight rushed in all at once, like wind and glass and whipping
into me, crashing, echoing.
The man fell over. He was dead. His eyes sat open. The pupils lifeless.
I'd killed him. Me! Brock
McConnell! I'd ended the life of a
breathing, thinking human being—a guy with twenty-five years of memories. Happy
memories, evil memories, all memories.
It's not like I'd done killed him alone. Gid's injury was probably fatal. My stab had served no real purpose. It was unnecessary. And yet . . . I'd done it. I'd ended a man's life. The
thought hammered behind my eyes. I'd done him a favor, right? He'd have surely
bled to death, writhed in the sweltering heat. He might've suffered for hours,
maybe days. I'd ended his misery. So why did the guilt coil inside me? Why did
it feel like a fist in my stomach, squeezing my guts from the inside?
My last meal retched out of me, covering the
dead man's tunic. I turned away and barfed again. I slipped and landed on
another body—a Nephite this time. The body jerked and twitched. I'd landed on his
chest; pushing his last breathe from his lungs. The twitching stopped. It felt
as if I'd killed a second man—a
comrade-in-arms! No. It wasn't me. I had nothing to do with it. But the timing . . . I felt revolted. I lurched away from the dead man's chest and slipped again. Why couldn't I keep my footing? I
glanced around. The ground was covered with gore. Littered with . . . with . . . It was all over my hands. My weapon.
The Scorpion banner was stained too.
The air was sick and sour—rotten milk. Rotten something. I blanked out. At least that's
the best way I can describe it. There was no particular reason for me to go
unconscious. I just don't remember the next few minutes. The sky, the fires, the blood, the bodies—every color smeared like a chalk drawing with water streaming
over it. I turned my face into the rising sun, letting the
brightness burn holes into my eyes.
The sting must've become too painful. I must've finally pinched
'em shut, but I don't recall. My next real thought was someone dragging at my
hands—at my banner pole. Someone was trying to steal it! Steal my Scorpion
standard! Something about this snapped me to alertness.
It was a Lamanite. No,
not a Lamanite. A Lightning Warrior. One of those elite soldiers from
Teotihuacan. He was fully armored. Small, shriveled skulls hung on his
shoulders. The heads had either been shrunk or . . . I didn't wanna think about another explanation, like the age of the victims. Tattoos swirled and writhed across every part of his flesh—even his knuckles,
stamped with crabs and snakes and stalks of corn, like pictures from an
astrology chart. The whites of his eyes stood out against his tattooed face. They look like moons. His pupils looked like blots of black ink. He wore no expression, as if he had
no soul. Yet I saw determination. He wanted my banner. He wanted that Scorpion sculpture as much as he'd ever wanted anything in his life. He wanted it as a token of victory.
When I resisted and didn't release the pole, he drew back his
lips. I couldn't tell if it was in anger or humor, but his teeth flashed brighter
than his eyes. His sword was enormous. The blade was as white as his teeth except
for a slick of red along the edge. It was like an ice sword from a fantasy painting—probably
a book cover I'd seen once. I couldn't even say what kinda stone it was. Marble?
Flint? It was flecked with tiny spots, like vanilla bean ice cream.
He hefted it back. My breath sorta stuck in my lungs, half in
and half out. I saw what was coming. I saw it all in my mind's-eye. I knew the
exact level and speed of that oncoming strike. I saw my own death. That vanilla-specked
blade was gonna whip into my neck, chop through my adam's apple. Then he'd
yank it back toward himself, slicing off my head as cleanly as Uncle Drew slaying
a chicken for Sunday dinner. I saw it all happen before it happened--before the blow could even arrive. I also imagined how my head would hit the ground and roll in the gore,
and my eyes would look back at my own headless torso as the Lightning Warrior pried my dead fingers from the pole with the Scorpion banner. Then
he'd leave me there, alone and forgotten among hundreds of others dead and
dying bodies on that bloody battlefield. My eyesight would fade to black, the circle getting smaller and smaller, like in an old movie.
But that's not what happened. Something else happened.
@ Copyright, 2015, Chris Heimerdinger
Very exciting! Yes, it is pretty graphic, but I appreciate you writing honestly about what battle must be like. Confusion, stink, gore, suffering...very little of it is glory and many people die slowly. I think the cleaned-up versions of battle glorify violence. I like that Brock is slipping and tripping, blanking out, getting distracted, etc. I had to look up who Brock is because I didn't remember him from the books. I guess I need to read the Zarahemla books!
ReplyDeleteI actually used this quote in my 3rd Podcast that I'm doing for foreverLDS.com, which is not yet online, but coming soon. In short, I found it a very concise way to state a great point. Thanks Sandi.
DeleteSuch a wonderful moment! Very intense but not so graphic that I didn't want to continue it. I'm so excited for the next book! I can't wait to share them with my new baby girl when she gets older. Thank you so much for these wonderful books Chris
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Deletewonderful! I loved it.. I didn't want it to end.. Please say this is near the end of the book.. so I know you are getting close! I want that last book so bad before Christmas.. but that's probably not gonna happen! So keep writing!
ReplyDeleteSorry, Becky, not before Christmas. Working and writing hard.
DeleteI loved it! Can't wait to read more! Detailed, yes, but not so graphic as I'd forbid the kids to read it. War IS graphic, unfortunately.
ReplyDeleteDo you have a deal for a full volume? I guess I could call you to ask..... I am bad about calling people....
ReplyDeleteYeah, you'd have to call Breanna. And I do offer a "deal" for all extant volumes in one purchase. Might even haggle a couple "free" items. But I can't call you. Well, I guess I could if you gave me a phone number, but I don't check these posts as often as I'd like, so to insure delivery by Christmas, call. I don't bite. Very hard.
ReplyDeleteYeah, you'd have to call Breanna. And I do offer a "deal" for all extant volumes in one purchase. Might even haggle a couple "free" items. But I can't call you. Well, I guess I could if you gave me a phone number, but I don't check these posts as often as I'd like, so to insure delivery by Christmas, call. I don't bite. Very hard.
ReplyDeleteExcellent writing as always, a d waiting anxiously for the next book.
ReplyDeleteThanks Michael. Sorry it took so long to reply. I'm trying to convince fans and readers to join foreverLDS.com. I haven't contributed to frostcave.blogspot.com in a long time. All things "Tennis Shoes" and Heimerdinger are happening on the new podcast/blog at foreverLDS.com. Oh, and I loved your work with "Phantom of the Opera." :)
DeleteThanks Michael. Sorry it took so long to reply. I'm trying to convince fans and readers to join foreverLDS.com. I haven't contributed to frostcave.blogspot.com in a long time. All things "Tennis Shoes" and Heimerdinger are happening on the new podcast/blog at foreverLDS.com. Oh, and I loved your work with "Phantom of the Opera." :)
DeleteThanks Michael! Sorry it took so long to reply. I've been trying to get members of FrostCave to swtich over to ForeverLDS.com, which is a combination podcast/blog and steadily becoming all things "Tennis Shoes" and Heimerdinger. I hope you'll check it out. Oh, and I loved your work in "Phantom of the Opera," by the way. :)
DeleteThanks Michael! Sorry it took so long to reply. I've been trying to get members of FrostCave to swtich over to ForeverLDS.com, which is a combination podcast/blog and steadily becoming all things "Tennis Shoes" and Heimerdinger. I hope you'll check it out. Oh, and I loved your work in "Phantom of the Opera," by the way. :)
DeleteI have read all of the tennis shoes books, and I'm really excited about book thirteen. I know you're in no hurry to finish the story, but when you do, before you continue the series, I have always thought about how the whole series would look in twelve movies. If you were to help make them into movies, that would be amazing. They would be really popular too. What do you think of that idea?
ReplyDeleteTrust me, Carsyn. I AM in a hurry. But life happens. I'd encourage you to join my new podcast/blog at foreverLDS.com. I'm trying to switch everything over to that site for all things "Tennis Shoes" and Heimerdinger. Hope to see you there! And yes, I'd love to make these into movies. Wanna be an investor? I figure to do the first book right it would cost about 5 million. Check your piggy bank. :)
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DeleteI understand your point that you made in Chapter 16 notes of Book 11. I understand your point in the reality of war and suffering. However, the details about violence displayed in the Tennis Shoes series displeases some of your readers very much; my mother, for instance. She likes it when you talk about peace, righteousness, and/or spiritual experiences in your books (I would too). One thing I suggest in particular is to leave out the detail of being beheaded. Might save a little ink. Pun aside, wasn't your books supposed to be teen-rated? The violence displayed in this narrative seemed R-rated to me.
ReplyDeleteI hear you and appreciate your sentiment, Wesley. I also got this comment from reader: "Yes, it is pretty graphic, but I appreciate you writing honestly about what battle must be like. Confusion, stink, gore, suffering...very little of it is glory and many people die slowly. I think the cleaned-up versions of battle glorify violence. I like that Brock is slipping and tripping, blanking out, getting distracted, etc." My objective is to offer readers a reality check of what ancient warfare was really life--and you'd be surprised how much detail I actually DON'T write--how disciplined I actually am. There's a difference between depicting violence and glorifying violence. You need only to watch many modern movies to see the difference. Books are easier because all the happens happens only in your mind. I don't have to describe a knife blade cutting through every artery and vein as it severs off somebody's head, but I will say that a person was beheaded. See the difference? I believe I also strive to depict the righteousness and spiritual realities of this era, but I think it's healthy to also show the realities of what the battle at Cumorah actually entailed. It actually makes the spiritual moments all that more a source of power and relief. Still, I am constantly at prayer and carefully considering what I write. Doesn't mean I'm perfect, but I'm doing the best I can. Thanks Wesley. And no, I never meant these books to be "teen-rated." That was a marketing choice my publisher made because the characters in the first book were teens. If you notice, the protagonists haven't been teenagers since Book 1.
DeleteI hear you and appreciate your sentiment, Wesley. I also got this comment from reader: "Yes, it is pretty graphic, but I appreciate you writing honestly about what battle must be like. Confusion, stink, gore, suffering...very little of it is glory and many people die slowly. I think the cleaned-up versions of battle glorify violence. I like that Brock is slipping and tripping, blanking out, getting distracted, etc." My objective is to offer readers a reality check of what ancient warfare was really life--and you'd be surprised how much detail I actually DON'T write--how disciplined I actually am. There's a difference between depicting violence and glorifying violence. You need only to watch many modern movies to see the difference. Books are easier because all the happens happens only in your mind. I don't have to describe a knife blade cutting through every artery and vein as it severs off somebody's head, but I will say that a person was beheaded. See the difference? I believe I also strive to depict the righteousness and spiritual realities of this era, but I think it's healthy to also show the realities of what the battle at Cumorah actually entailed. It actually makes the spiritual moments all that more a source of power and relief. Still, I am constantly at prayer and carefully considering what I write. Doesn't mean I'm perfect, but I'm doing the best I can. Thanks Wesley. And no, I never meant these books to be "teen-rated." That was a marketing choice my publisher made because the characters in the first book were teens. If you notice, the protagonists haven't been teenagers since Book 1.
DeleteStumbled upon this by accident. Great chapter, now I need to take all my son's books and start reading them myself. Strong work!
ReplyDeleteThanks! I haven't visited this blog in a while. I've tried to move things over to foreverlds.com. But there are still folks who seem determined to visit here to find out what's new. My advice? Joint both and I'll try to keep up with both. But foreverLDS.com will eventually be the happenin' place. :)
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